Arkay
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Brian's ego would never allow it. He's smarter than everyone else. He's the master of all things forest survival - in his head. His admitted hero, Christopher Thomas Knight excised all care, the road behind, the future, an audience called humanity, to live as he pleased as a hermit/burglar in the forest for 27 years before he was captured. Brian's big mistake was choosing Gabby for conversion to the iconoclastic, self-manufactured religion of Brian. He just couldn't break her of her love of the world and the souls who populate it. You mind as well try to teach a fish NOT to swim. That simmering incompatibility exploded on a dry creek bed. He finally blew his gaskets. Gabby was a mare who could not and would not be tamed or fully recruited into Brian's plan of the ages. She, not he, was innately liberated.
The next tool in his arsenal is to console himself with blowing off the past and getting down to the grand plan - the fully-realized Brian, alone, in charge, self-cutoff, living the dream.
The Moving Finger writes; and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all thy Tears wash out a Word of it.
-------- Rubáiyát of Omar Khayyám
I suspect Brian believes this very thought.
MOO
That's one of my favorite poems, and I think you are a lovely and eloquent writer.
I'm just not sure I agree with your assessment.
IMO it's all much more simple. I think Gabby was an absolutely lovely young woman. I think BL is a cocky young man. I think they experienced a young love and the freedom that comes from being young without children and wanting to explore a lifestyle. I think ultimately they were incompatible and confined in too-close quarters. I think he lost it, had some sort of psychotic break, covered for himself, ran home and then ran away.
Your writing is vivid and passionate and poetic and you certainly have a lucid point of view. I just don’t think it’s as complex as BL masterminding a plan to break a wild mare to fulfill his vision of a Kingdom of Brian.
But JMO. Please continue your writing because it is beautiful.